AWAITED DESIRES
someday when you'll be mine
there would be no murk only embellished shine
It will last till aeon and will be perpetual.
It will be so true , so pure, so innocent and real.
how to say , what to convey,
but the feeling inside are so white...not a pinch of grey.
The darkness inside me, coaled the walls of my heart,
when u stepped in there was a rain of glee to wipe it apart.
Ur eyes are my deity,
I feel near to AL-mighty
Its all about u dear, that
can make me till eternity
So somber, so sullen, my life will be without u
my heart will squeal out,,
closest to my heart are rares,,
u r among those rarest few.
My sole will squeal out,I love u ,,,OH! let me be with u
always wandering how to tell u,
but my heart will speak, words my lips couldn't
If your mine , I'll give u my love
pure which will be BIBLE like true.
How to define you,, naive like a new born,
gentle to touch, sweetest of corn.
freshness of rose in u
Divine as my god.
what to say of heart, biggest and broad.
sober and serene, has been along in all odds
cover of Ur arms seems safest and soot
they fill me with unending desires,
everlasting love, from my very root.
sunrise , rainfall,
sunset to snowfall,
sunset to snowfall,
all season passes away.
All days go up to down from dew to dawn.
All reasons inside not to tell u.
but u never tried to read ...
that i'll be all shattered and tattered
lost in the billions
If u not stay here and if ever I realize
that Ur gone
my soul will squeal out. I love u.
let me be with u.
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sanjeevani keshav90
THE fIRST ONE IS GOOD BUT THE RHYMING FAILS AT TIMES ALSO IT DOES NOT CREATE ANY PARTICULAR SITUATION IT SEEMS LIKE A NARRATION. IT FEELS LIKE YOU ARE WRITING ABOUT THE PERSON YOU LOVES AND ASKING QUESTIONS TO HIM AND SETTING SOME CONDITIONS
ReplyDeleteVERY TRUE FEELINGS ARE WRITTEN.
ReplyDeleteIT'S ALL ABOUT EXPRESSING CLEARLY(AS CLEAR AS CRYSTAL)
KEEP WRITTING.